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I see upon a hill,
the setting sun, fleeing from the night...
The moon coming above that horizon for the kill,
to rise and banish to darkness all light.

Though time brushes over creation,
I live on, a slave to immortality.
Though I was the choser of my own damnation,
Twas humanity that was the cause of my brutality.

Now the world around me decays,
unlike my flesh and mind...
Time has left my future in a haze,
and the changing world has been unkind.

I see upon a hill, but another slope downward,
where the pointless  journey continues on...
unto to no end is my existence forever moving forward
Nostalgia is dead, as my past is forever gone.
An immortal man basically stating: Immortality is overdosing on the gift of life.

image by Ivan Aivazovsky
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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
Not sure about immortality but I would at least want to live for a few hundred years.
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SayaFantasy97 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
loved this poem, great job!
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GrubbsWriting Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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SayaFantasy97 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome
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Brother-Tom Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem is quite intriguing! I kind of see the Lord Himself looking on humanity after the seven years of tribulation is finished before He returns. Looking at the ship coming in, the picture looks like something from about late 19th century. Overall, well done!
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agonfighter Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Student Artisan Crafter
is this ortaköy mosque?
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Artmosh Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
nice work! :)
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Salinger1 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
Fine.
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alexiuss Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
I'm pretty sure Aivazovsky drew the image, you should credit him even though he is dead.
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GrubbsWriting Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'll do that right now
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comicprints Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow this is amazing poetry. I've just started writing some poetry myself and whilst I like writing it I find it quite frustrating and difficult, so I respect your talent shown here.
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Acidum07 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is very well done and I enjoy the subject matter!I do have to disagree with his/your point of view thou but that is just me.
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HeroOfMobius Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
This is a beautiful work of poetry here. I wonder from whose point of view the poem is being said. From my perspective, this story relates to the character of Hoenheim from Fullmetal Alchemist.
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
This is a really nice poem. :) Great work!
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GrubbsWriting Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you thank you!
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :D
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DarthSithari Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
Immortality: who would want it?
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