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Unhinged, the floodgates collapse
The waters weighed so heavily on them that in the dark of night
do they unwillingly liberate the transparent stillborn
unto the dry soil once adjacent to the gates.

Two clocks tick, their gears turning at the uneven tempo
Unwound, rusting to a screeching halt on the command of the flood.
Time stops at the hinder, And neutrality dies on impact.

What a sight as I close my eyes,

Late at night when energy dies.

Taken to flight my psyche then flies.

Do as one might, the cold sweat brings about my cries.

Fighting my fight, in where my imagination lies

The withered flowers ashen and in bloom

Be my soul to cower, from the ever impending doom.

Two clocks tick, one my own and the other my fate.
The flood arrives to consume
and to the end does the time die and go black...

Open my eyes to the dark if night
An abyss before me to lay back down...
down where the floodgates come unhinged
and my imagination lies.
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This is based on a dream I had about a week ago, and it conveys an emotional metaphor filled with symbolism and imagery in order to provoke the deepest thoughts of the reader. I chose the title because I wanted to use this poem to portray my thoughts on a series of personal events in my life going on right now.

It explains how in sleep, the mind can go just about anywhere, and the lack of control that is involved with the natural process of sleep induced hallucination sends our minds on, for lack of a better term, an acid trip. There, In the dream world, we can be reminded of our burdens, our dreams, our fears, or our hopes.

In this particular scenario, two clocks are used to represent the life span of the dream and the dreamer within the dream itself. The person sleeping feels drowned and bewildered by their surroundings. Confused and scared, they feel the end approaching-and suddenly they wake up, that cold sweat lining their pale skin in the night. All they can really do is return to sleep, surrendering control once again, to their deepest imaginations.

Now then, THAT it is the literal explanation of the poem...My purpose behind writing it is that this entire holiday break has been truly awful...it could be a lot worse, but things just kind of suck right now. I chose the title, “Free Spirit Fail Safe” because I wrote this in thoughts of my closest friends and my wonderful girlfriend. We as humans sleep, not only to replenish our bodies and minds, but to escape from reality for a short time. Hence, my friends and I are all for the most part and usually, free spirited folk, and sleep is just a way for us to escape the hells of our personal lives, which right now are under tremendous stress.
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow; this really paints a full picture to me, and such a chaotic and emotive one.
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GrubbsWriting Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow. That was fantastic! The imagery and symbolism were truly amazing!
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GrubbsWriting Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student General Artist
you're welcome!!
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Tarzok Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Very nice and beautiful.
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ShiningSteel Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've never read something like this before. Very nice! :)
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LupusIntus Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic piece: the imagery is incredible and vivid.

Your style of writing is also very smooth and flowing and I could absolutely see/hear this put to music as a song.

Very well done! :D
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DarthSithari Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
And I thought I had strange dreams.
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